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Thanks again for everyone's help. I've written another essay that I'll type below. I felt like this one was somewhat easier to write than the last, just because we had talked about a few of these ideas in my Anthropology class a few days ago. I still see a lot of problems with it, but since I'm just going for a passing grade, I'd be interested to see if you all think there is enough improvement over my last one.

Prompt: "We are all influenced in lasting ways - whether positive or negative - by the particular kind of community in which we grow up."

"It is often debated whether or not the community we grow up in influences our lives in lasting ways. I believe it certainly does. Our upbringing plays a vital role in affecting our attitude and personality, our future potential as adults, and how we view society and the world.

Numerous scientific studies have been done to test the affects of nature versus nurture on people's personalities. Nature is our inherited traits - those we are born with. Nurture is our learned traits - those we develop during our early childhood. In one study, several sets of twins were separated at birth. They grew up in different homes, in different communities, and even in different parts of the world. After reaching adulthood, one pair of twins wound up finding each other. While recounting their story later, they said that even though their physical traits were identical, their values and personalities were extremely different.

What type of community we grow up in also has a great affect on the number of opportunities we have to better ourselves. Children raised in middle-class to upper-class communities often receive a strong education. Though they may not initially be naturally gifted, they are provided with many chances to improve. On the other hand, children who grow up in lower-class communities often get stuck in situations they are not able to easily get out of. Even if they have strong natural abilities that could lead them to a well-paying job, they rarely have the education or guidance to develop those talents.

The community we grow up in plays a role in how we view society as well. An isolated tribe in Africa knows only its land, its economy, and its people because of limited contact with the outside world. In contrast, people in a prospering first world country such as our own are in constant relation with all types of surroundings and ways of life - whether through direct contact or the media. Unlike the tribe in Africa which knows only its own culture, we as Americans have much more knowledge at our disposal to make informed decision about the world.

It is important to keep in mind that our life is not set in stone just because of where we grow up. We should always do our best to make the most of our lives. However, we can be certain that upbringing does affect our personal values and attitude, the opportunities we will receive in life, and our view of society."

GOOD JOB! MUCH BETTER!!!!!!!!!

This is a great improvement over the first one. Very nice work!!! I think an essay like that would do just fine!