Which essay sounds better? ChatGPT A or a Paraphrased version B?

[bjcheung77]

Hmm, my first time using ChatGPT...

You've got the first option of A)



Then the second option of B)



Wow, in less than 30 seconds a pretty good essay x2...

[ss20ts]

Both read like someone who spent too much time in a thesaurus. There are some grammatical errors. It definitely doesn't read like an essay someone wrote for a scholarship. It's full of fluff.

[Jonathan Whatley]

"Show, don't tell."

[LevelUP]

The 2nd one used fancy words like it was trying to sound smart.

Both didn't seem personable.

ChatGPT is good at making up stories. You can guide it with the right prompts. 

Here's my version

[bjcheung77]

Yeah, I did write my own... Basically, when I started the EDX course, there is an option to apply for financial assistance. It had three areas to answer, and took me a long time to finish all three areas. After 4 days, I received an email stating I got the 90% discount for the course. It took me like 40-45 minutes each to max out close to the 2500 characters per question. I was looking at ways to see if AI could do something like that and what would result from the AI work... AI isn't all that it is cracked up to be...

[davewill]

I have to say neither. They both sound wordy and generic.