01-22-2014, 11:43 AM
Anila,
I don't know where to begin. I would advise you to save your testing $ and take the Comp I and Comp II class. This essay would in no way allow for a passing score.
Try to go back and outline your written essay, and hopefully you will see how disjointed this essay really is. I see you have started with an attention getting opening line and 5 paragraphs. That is about the only thing going for you. You really need to think about the basics of essay writing, none of which are demonstrated here. You have issues with grammar usage (subject /verb matching ), varying tenses, article adjectives not matching the subject, etcetera and no basic cohesive thought flowing through this essay. Perhaps you were taught that a paragraph must contain 3-5 sentences. When you start out writing in elementary school that may have been the norm. To receive college credit, your essay should end around 1000 words as a target. Also, your paragraphs are very disjointed. You should have a transition sentence to and from each paragraph. You need to also shape your paragraphs so that you are able to demonstrate lateral thinking, as you bring in outside information, author, reference, etc., to relate to the subject chosen.
During the test you are given the topic to write about. It is a timed essay. The best way to prepare for the test is to practice timed writing daily. There are books for daily writing prompts if you really want to go that route. But if you don't get a grasp on developing the mental outline and formatting your writing, you will not be a successful essay writer. As for all the grammar mistakes, minimally, practice writing in Word and see how many times the computer "corrects" or highlights in green what you have written. The CLEP computer will not correct grammar, essay format or run spell check for you.
I don't mean to be overly discouraging towards taking ALL CLEP tests, but in the area of writing, you could really use a couple of classes. The ability to write well will follow you throughout your career, so make sure you have a solid grasp of the basic concepts now.
I don't know where to begin. I would advise you to save your testing $ and take the Comp I and Comp II class. This essay would in no way allow for a passing score.
Try to go back and outline your written essay, and hopefully you will see how disjointed this essay really is. I see you have started with an attention getting opening line and 5 paragraphs. That is about the only thing going for you. You really need to think about the basics of essay writing, none of which are demonstrated here. You have issues with grammar usage (subject /verb matching ), varying tenses, article adjectives not matching the subject, etcetera and no basic cohesive thought flowing through this essay. Perhaps you were taught that a paragraph must contain 3-5 sentences. When you start out writing in elementary school that may have been the norm. To receive college credit, your essay should end around 1000 words as a target. Also, your paragraphs are very disjointed. You should have a transition sentence to and from each paragraph. You need to also shape your paragraphs so that you are able to demonstrate lateral thinking, as you bring in outside information, author, reference, etc., to relate to the subject chosen.
During the test you are given the topic to write about. It is a timed essay. The best way to prepare for the test is to practice timed writing daily. There are books for daily writing prompts if you really want to go that route. But if you don't get a grasp on developing the mental outline and formatting your writing, you will not be a successful essay writer. As for all the grammar mistakes, minimally, practice writing in Word and see how many times the computer "corrects" or highlights in green what you have written. The CLEP computer will not correct grammar, essay format or run spell check for you.
I don't mean to be overly discouraging towards taking ALL CLEP tests, but in the area of writing, you could really use a couple of classes. The ability to write well will follow you throughout your career, so make sure you have a solid grasp of the basic concepts now.
DD #1
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ALEKS Intermediate Algebra, College Algebra, Pre-Calc
CLEP A&I Lit, College Comp., College Mathematics, Sociology
DSST. Environment and Humanity RTSTP
B&M CC 7 total credits Music performance, Intro to Business
ACE SCUBA Diver, Advanced Diver, and Rescue Diver.
FEMA 15 so far, PDS complete
B&M Univ 9 UL English credits, Creative Writing, Psychology, Statistics, History of Medieval Europe, Economics, Novels of Jane Austen, Great Christian Writers
Dual enrolled classes for this school year: Film and Worldview, American History after 1865, Survey of American Literature, Comp 1(school requirement), Anatomy, Physiology, Medical Terminology I, Ethics, American Military History in Film, Developmental Psychology, Chemistry
Cornerstone COSC, World Lit for Children, Public Speaking BYU, complete
CNA and Advance CNA complete
AS from COSC COMPLETE!
Currently interviewing material on InstantCert to decide next test
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